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Stefan Baciu's avatar

This is a ferocious and uncompromising piece of writing: dense, but in the most rewarding sense. It reads less like a conventional narrative and more like an immersive myth, one you don’t simply follow with your eyes but seem to step into and experience. The imagery builds with a kind of ritualistic insistence, layering symbols of masonry, blindness, labor, sterility, and sacrifice until the effect becomes almost liturgical.

There is a sense that the story exists outside of time: both ancient and industrial, Biblical and post-apocalyptic, suggesting that creation and annihilation might occur simultaneously, in the same breath.

What struck me most deeply was the way the prose resists any form of relief. There are no clear exits, no gentle metaphors or comforting resolutions. Instead, the piece leans into repetition and pressure, forcing a kind of transformation through sheer endurance. The confined space of the bathroom-cube evolves into an entire cosmology, and the repetitive act of cleaning becomes something almost metaphysical, a ritual act layered with meaning. By the time bleach is introduced, it no longer feels like a mere object within the story. Still, it has become an idea in itself: purification without clarity, order imposed without comprehension.

This is not a story that offers easy answers or explains itself in tidy terms, and that refusal is precisely what gives it such power. It places trust in the reader’s willingness to stay with it, to be worn down and reshaped by its force. The result is something brutal, unflinching, and visionary: a piece that leaves you altered by the time you reach the end.

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Man Hei Wong's avatar

Prose poem? I had to slow way down

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